Wednesday, March 24, 2010

Stuff That Makes Me Laugh

I haven't been posting much, because I've been writing a lot.

I'm writing something new... this is a first draft, unrevised, and completely taken out of context, but it makes me laugh.  I just had to share.

    “You’re late,” Sid snaps as he marches up to us.  “And weren’t you wearing that yesterday?”  He glares at my attire.
    I smooth out the front of my shirt and shrug, eyeing his tweed sports jacket—a dead ringer for yesterday’s right down to the pattern of coffee stains on the lapels.  Gideon stretches out his hand and touches the collar of my shirt briefly, and it blushes from white to pink.  I grimace at him, and he throws me a smug smile.  No one has commented on his outfit—a dark maroon silk suit with a pale grey Mandarin-collar dress shirt, but I gather it would take either a very brave or very stupid man to comment on Gideon’s fashion sense.

[snip]  (Sid walks away and Gideon and Max are talking...)
   
    “I have to be back by seven-thirty,” I say, giving myself some time to walk to Alice’s place.
    “Hot date?”
    “Something like that.”  I look down at my shirt and gesture wildly at him.  “Seriously?  Pink?  You couldn’t have gone with blue?”
    “It’s salmon,” he says—and he sounds a little defensive about it.
    “It’s fucking pink,” I say bitterly.

Sometimes I just have to write things that make me laugh.

Wednesday, March 3, 2010

Description, Description, Description!

I think descriptions are something that I struggle most with in my writing.  Dialogue, which some people seem to struggle with, comes easy to me.  I can imagine the characters in my stories coming alive with dialogue--exactly how they will say something, what the other will respond in return, etc.  I could, if I cared to, visually describe each scene I put them into in detail.  I'm tempted, at times, to draw the floor plans of the houses they inhabit, but for some reason I don't need to.  I can always remember exactly what the house layout is for each story, and they are all different!  Sometimes they are based off of houses I've lived in, sometimes they are based off of houses I want to live in...

I think the reasons I DON'T feel my descriptions are very strong are really two-fold: 1) I can see it, so I expect my readers can, too, and 2) I think we all feel a bit repetitive saying things like, "the man had dark brown hair and blue eyes".  There's only so many ways you can write that description before you want to bonk yourself over the head with a hard object.

But consider that there are five senses to use for description:
  • Sight
  • Sound
  • Smell
  • Touch
  • Taste
Most of us rely on the big one: SIGHT.  It's easy to do:
The chair was dark red.
His hair was jet black.
The sunset shone copper off the water below.

What about using SOUND?
The waves crashed upon the rocky shore, reverberating in my ears.

Or SMELL?
The chair smelled of mold and dust, having sat unoccupied for more than five years.

Or TOUCH?
His hair felt like silk against my fingertips as I brushed it back from his forehead.

Or TASTE?
The brine of the seawater filled my mouth, sharp and sour against my tongue.

Okay, this won't win me any Pushcart Prizes, but it'll definitely help exercise my descriptive writing muscles...